You are so beautiful, Mel Def. There is nothing to critique.
You sure have spawned a fawn, young lady:
The sun was low as it was 
DAWN; Mel Def 
YAWNED. The sun rose in the sky with much 
BRAWN and Mel Def looked over at her shadow on the 
LAWN and realized she has just 
SPAWNED a 
FAWN on her 
LAWN.
Soon the sun had 
WITHDRAWN and to Mel Def's surprise instead of a grassy implant of 
FAWN it was really a 
SWAN.
You are so beautiful.
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You are the anchor of 
LIGHT with a non stop fitness 
FLIGHT and your halo shines 
BRIGHT
Your soul for training and dieting isn't black and 
WHITE because you are the
 QUEEN of of dieting and training all through the 
NIGHT: take 
FLIGHT; stay 
UPRIGHT; be your ultraviolet 
LIGHT!
Will I ever get stronger and better than I am 
NOW?!
How?
POW!!!!!!! 
With a personal blast of Rock-On 
WOW!!
Do you see it 
NOW?!!
Wholly 
COW!! 
Confucius say: 
A woman who drive's internal Rock-Ons like hell are bound to get there.
So Blast off today!
Muh! Ha, ha, ha 
Its all you, Mel Def!...................>Pump the heart UP. 
And, let the ROCK-On's let the body KNOW what the hell's sup!
One more thing to remember as you battle and WIN:
The only true 
"medication relief" is the contents of the skull attached to your neck.........
Look at you: Your body is willing in your application, your mind is consenting in your innovation, now connect the heart for dedication to meet your destination.
(One can move many mountains with correct spirit and mental toughness, and can create their own avalanche of rocks while trying to go up if one isn't careful.--(Chillen) 
Be aware of your internal enemies. Draw them close. Get to know them. Know them well. Connect your heart and your soul within and cast a spell and throw them all in hell! Oh.......what a fuggen, smell!
You have it all, young lady. Look no further than within yourself for all the answers you ever need.
ROCK ON, my dear young lady.
Best regards,
Chillen